lord this needs work, The dialogue is odd, to say the least and really needed more contractions, There was weird tell instead of show going on that came across as lazy writing, And in the last two chapters Mina and Janos adopt a street kid who has a painful to read wisp, I mean lisp.
And she's just like all other magical child characters, she asks for vegetables for her first meal in ages when given the choice, but it's less believable because she's been living in a hole on the streets to keep safe for some time now and has no problems with trust.
While the story itself
is enjoyable, it loses a star because of dialogue, I swear, as soon as Mina stopped being afraid of Janos which didn't take very long, it was "darling, I love you, need you, love you, very much love you, need you, need you, need you, love you love love loveloveneedloveneedloveneedneedneedyneedloveneed you.
" My shoes were in danger of being covered with vomitus, I started skimming just so that I could get storyline points without all the extra,
When the street urchin makes her appearance, it just gets worse, I don't know how fouryearolds talk, but she seemed a bit precocious, even with her Elmer Fuddtype speech impediment, Her name is Kafrine, and she's all awone because da big dogs ated up her mommy and daddy, Ugh. Sorry, but after a few pages of "Kafrine," my empathy was dead,
I would love to follow this series and see what happens to the brothers, but there's only so much I can take.
I absolutely love werewolves and the whole fated mates thing, but the author needs to reel this in a little, My God, does this book need some new dialogue, Possibly a new heroine. To say that Mina's dialogue was grating with her incessant professions of love, which were sickeningly mushy, is to undermine my patience and soul of a diehard romantic.
The saddest part is that it could have been astar read if Mina's character had been more believable the poor, sad, little virgin that is scared of the big bad wolf leaps into love within a couple paragraphs.
Whaaat!
The mush is just not believable, The dialogue is too proper and doesn't flow appropriately, There is just no variation Mina professes love every time she speaks "I love you, my love, I'm yours and you're mine, we're mates that love each other, My love, I'm your love, I love you, love, . . " gets old really freakn' fast, The only reason I finished the book is because of my policy to always finish if I read more than a chapter, I'm thinking of revising that rule,
Now, if I'm able to read a snippet of the next one and see that the author has redeemed herself, then I'll continue with the series.
Siren Allure: Erotic Paranormal Romance, werewolves, HEA Janos Farkas is one of the Princes in hiding, His parents were murdered in a revolt that was brought about because of greed, It isn't until he meets Mina Tremayne that he realizes that sometimes accepting the help of the Packs that swore their allegiance to the Crown and his family isn't such a bad thing.
Mina was completely alone in the world, her every action carefully taken into account so that there was no misstep that would send her failing miserably and landing on the streets, or worse.
It is by total happenstance that she walks into Janos's world, a cracked keg of beer being the catalyst that will send her carefully shaped world into complete chaos.
To him she is a thing of beauty, pure in her mind and soul, To her he's the man of her dreams and is the only one that can shake up her wellordered, if poor, life, A Siren Erotic Romance.