Fetch What If I Show You The Devil: A True Story Of Demonic Possession And Haunting Written By One Of The Survivors Designed By Nicholas D. Eberley Distributed As Publication

really fascinating and unsettling read that I would have loved to giveorto,

However this really needed to be proof read and edited as this ruined the impact of what the author was saying, It really distracted me when I was starting to feel a build up of tension,

Sorry Nicholas. Get it proof read and edited and you have a great story with real tension, Needs work

With more attention to detail, spelling, and editing this book could have been a good telling of the author's experiences.
However, as it is it lacks a lot to be desired, The story is all over the place, Anyone not the size of a broom handle is said to have weighed six hundred pounds, which perturbed me from the beginning of the book.
All in all, if the author chose to write about his experiences, he should have least put forth a decent effort in the proofreading and editing department.
Open Mind

I found this work to be very informative and it has given me insight into a subject that many won't write or talk about.
Overtook the typos, bad grammar and punctuation, . .

and there may be a story here,

I tried to turn in all of the errors I could find to help the guy out, even though I despise that feature because it takes the money away from the freelance editors who depend on authors to hire them in order to put food on the table for their children.
Amazon doing this is horrible, It

also makes indie authors lazy, to the point that they don't even run spellchecker anymore, or give their book a final read before submitting it for publishing.


I gave this man a pass on that because I get the feeling he doesn't know how to use spellchecker, and that his grammar is what it is, and perhaps he didn't have the resources for an editor or know of anyone who could look it over for him.
Plus, the subject matter IS quite sensitive to be showing to "just anyone, "

I don't think it ends as abruptly as some say it does, Or maybe he's fixed it and republished since then He does say what's happened since he's left that house, He did figure out what the demon is after or, rather, who, It did mess up his life a bit, though, Things didn't go quite as planned for him, But he's okay with it, . . somehow. Which is sad in a way,

I gave four because of the obvious flaws in the book, but the great effort and content made up for the rest.
He was very brave to tell his story,

If anyone is looking for head spinning, puke spewing, unrealistic crap that you see on the ghost shows on TV or in the movies, you won't find it here.
This is a story about oppression, not about possession, The two are very different, and oppression always comes first, very good read!!!

I could not stop reading this book! In fact, I was sad when it ended, Never a dull or boring part, just straight to the point, I am rating this book on the story and not on the author's writing or spelling skills, This would have been better with a good editor, However . . he's telling his story and it's pretty creepy, it does make one me think twice when thinking about trying to record EVPs, ghosthunting, and so on, This is worth reading even if you do have to concentrate just a bit harder due to lack of writing skills, If you think of this more as someone writing out a statement, that may help, Was expecting a quick, easy read about a dark topic, Instead, what I got was a boring, hardtoswallow piece of rushed writing and poor editing,

This was painful to get through, not only because the writer was insufferably bland, but his choice to lace his narration with expletives seemed forced and unnatural.


The story jumps all over, Theres no cohesiveness whatsoever. I recommend that the author try and review his work with beta readers before he publishes next time, Compelling But Not Enough

The author has promise as a writer, but this was like a literal first draft, The spelling and punctuation were so bad I could not believe it, Author has problems with possessives, For example , "Emilys house" instead of "Emily's house" and " i went" instead of "I went, " Seriously Also sentence structure s needed serious rework,

Story just abruptly ended, No resolution, no lessons learned, etc,

Waste of.I felt like I was reading a first draft of this book, Interesting story

Eberley's story sounds terrifying, but unfortunately his writing and spelling skills are detracting from what could be a solid tale.
Hopefully if Mr. Eberley's continues to selfpublish, he will see the need for a professional proof reader and editor, What if I show you the Devil

Not a bad book but could be better a little disappointing not well written a lot of mistakes missed out words also not great grammar either Was not well written

It reads more like he rushed thru the story so he could say he did.
It was interesting. I just wished he would go into more detail Poorly written

Very poorly written and edited, Grammer should have been corrected along with sentence structure, For this reason I didn't think the story was real, A true account of demonic possession as told first hand by someone who was there, Written almost as a survival guide, this book takes you through the details of one man's journey with his family and the supernatural, .