Enjoy For Free Hatch (The Dragons Of Laton, #1) Drafted By James Stevens Available As Manuscript

of the story:
Hatch is a story about a young man named Ammon who accidentally links and forms a connection with a dragon.
In the midst of forming this connection, he makes an enemy of Tirate, a selfish villainous man who wants nothing more than to be King.
But in order to do so, he needs to first be linked to a dragon, . and that dragon happens to be Ammons, This sends Ammon on an unimaginable adventure that's full of twists and turns!


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I give this story a confident five.
While there were three small editing errors I spotted and one or two instances where I felt the plot was a little predictable, everything else about the story was near flawless.
When I started this book, I wasn't sure how I was going to feel about it because the synopsis doesn't really tell you much about what the book is going to be about.
But after the first chapter, I was hooked and couldn't put the book down for the life of me.
Normally, I'm a sappy reader and have to have a lot romance in a book to read it.
This book was something entirely different in that aspect than what I'm used to reading, However, it's the sheer creativity that captivated me into being so glued, Stevens did a wonderful job of creating a world that you could see clearly without ever being confused about what was going on.
Overall, the characters were all really lovable, . even the dragons! I wasn't expecting it to end the way it did which leaves me very eager to read the next book! I definitely recommend this book to anyone who loves YA with a good adventure!


BELOW WILL CONTAIN SPOILERS:

From the very beginning I was hooked by the setting and Ammon, who was a tender.
. basically, he kept the fires going to warm the dragon eggs until they hatched and made a link with a knight.
Defying the rules by extreme odds, Ammon linked himself with a golden dragon, I really liked Ammon as a character, though I have to admit that his cluelessness drove me a little nuts in the beginning.
But as the story goes on, he matures and grows as a character, gaining knowledge about the things he was clueless about.
Which is kinda cool that he grew so much from where he started,

I absolutely loved his dragon Fulgid as well! He was just so cute! I adored that him and Ammon shared a special connection.
I also liked that Fulgid accepted El, even when Ammon was unsure of her, I really liked how strong willed El was and I'm very thankful that there was some romance in this book.
Overall, I really enjoyed this book and can't wait for the sequel! From peasant to king

Delightful story.
A peasant boy assigned to care for the eggs accidentally links with a small gold dragon at the hatchling instead of the waint knight.
The small gold dragon is like no other dragon, Follow boys journey as he becomes a knight and then king and then as he leads his knights on dragons in a fight to save his queen and the peoplof his kingdom.

DNF.

I want to preface this review by saying that I'm actually quite at home with cliched stories, in fact, some of my favourite stories from novels to movies don't do anything too different from the expected.
So if originality is a must for you then you can add those to my list of critiques despite it not having bothered me personally.


Childish
I understand that this novel is targeted towards "young adults" but I feel a more accurate tag might have actually been "children".
I say this because the plot itself is way to linear with setup and payoff happening almost a chapter of one another.
The villain is onedimensional and incompetent, coming off as a cartoon character rather than a threatening presence.
To top it all off every event is explained within lines of its occurrence almost as if the reader is as oblivious as the main character.


Bland Main Character
A common problem with the hero's journey trope is the protagonist becoming a passive character who simply reacts to the events occurring around him rather than actively participating in them.
Giving a character a goal can go a long way to alleviating this problem, You can guess Ammon doesn't have, Events happen to him, he does not make events happen,
If that was my only critique of him then it would be something I could overlook.
That however isn't the case, since like many "Joe Everymans", Ammon suffers from a lack of personality.
I struggle to attach anything to him, since even his temporary destitution doesn't leave a flaw or quirk of any kind on him.

Worse yet, he is rendered little more than the pet of his own dragon, You heard me right. There is no partnership between him and his dragon, instead he acts more like mediator between his wondrous dragon and the lay people.
If Ammon could do something then it can be assumed that his dragon would be able to do ittimes better.

I don't know why the perspective is kept on Ammon, he's clearly the most boring character in the novel, his dragon would've been a more interesting POV to explore the world through.


In conclusion, I'm sure Ammon grows to be a better character but accompanied by the childish narrative, there's almost no way I'm going to be able to finish this novel.
I loved the storystars, Hated the lack of editing really bad grammar, spelling etc,stars. I averaged and weighted the story more heavily so I gave it four so as not to discourage readers.
Im writing my review as I go with this one,


The story is fun, enjoying the dragons, the plot is starting to deepen a little, but the bad guy is pretty cliche.
Nothing had really surprised me and Id say the story has been predictable so far, I am enjoying the story, but one major thing is taking me out of the story and making me cringe quite often.
The author needs to learn how to show emotion in body language and facial expressions, because using an exclamation mark to show joy, anger, anguish, determination and many more emotions, is just tiring.
There are sooo many exclamation marks and it cheapens conversations and makes readers like me cringe, describe facial expressions, body language voice tone etc instead,

Obviously everything I said a above is a personal opinion,

My rating for the firstis betweenand,stars.




Things havent gotten much better sadly, There are quite a few editing errors popping up, Several words with lines going through them from editing the book are still there, Aboutinstances so far there are other minor editing mistakes, which arent as glaringly obvious,

As I continue to

read, Im struggling to like the main character, He seemingly doesnt use his brain, like at all, Hes always confused, hes kind of like a leaf in the wind, . just floats wherever the wind takes him, does whatever people tell him to do, somehow survives everything even though he has no idea whats going on around him.


I guess this story strikes me as a more light hearted story that doesnt take itself very seriously.
Which theres a place for stories like that, Obviously most of the people who have read this story really liked it, which is awesome, Sadly for me, this one isnt working out and I may not even finish it

My rating for this sectionisstars.
This was a very good book, The only reason I didn't give itis I found the ending to be little childish and not very interesting.
It kind of made it almost impossible for a second book and still be as good as this one.


Besides that it was great story that I loved to read, I really liked the direction it was going in, I liked how the characters where slowly growing and developing and becoming more mature, But then he went and gave the characters almost exactly what they wanted in the end and I don't see how the second one could be good.
Not just some fairy tail,

I personally like the books with action and a good story, I loved this story, it kept me reading when I was supposed to be doing other things.
I loved the characters, I loved the descriptions, there were good guys, bad guys, loved some, hated some.
I cant wait for the next book to come out in this series,

My only complaint: This book needs to be edited better, many of the sentences don't make sense, it really needs to be cleaned up, A friend lent me this, and it was an easy, fun book, The writing left something to be desired, but otherwise it was a fun, adventurous read, To be honest I remembered Pern and I just had to read the book, Ammon impresses a hatchling gold dragon, I guess I should start before that, Ammon's job was to care for the dragon eggs, He had to wait for them to be ready for hatching, Only the Noble could aspire to impress a dragon, Ammon manages it and escapes with his tiny dragon, He is about a catsized animal, He must hide as many are after him, The prince himself is after him to start a revolution, This is how Ammon meets his new friends who are trying to save his dragon,
I found the story a pageturner and can't wait for another in the series, Fantastic book !

The book kept me interested from beginning, I do have several questions, . . what is a teacher dragon
What was the significance of the cross Who killed celest Can't wait for next book for the answers.
Great story, waiting for the next book, : I really have a lot of fun reading this book, Its a little bit cliche with the theme and plot but it has some interesting character in it so its not get bored.

looking forward to read thend book, Great book. I'm long way from YA, heck I have YA grandchildren, but I loved it, Started slow and I started to put the book down, but ended up staying up past my bed time to finish it.
One thing, if you are going to make rules for dragons, you have to tell the dragons.

A few errors but a thrilling story!

I lived the story! It was familiar enough to be understood but also original and unique in its own way.
I really liked all of the characters, they were all very well thought out and worked well with each other.
As many have said, yes, spelling and grammar errors are littered throughout but if you can get by it without it bothering you too much, you will really enjoy this book.
Enjoyed it

This book was very well written and I enjoyed it immensely.
Great for kids and adults, I would definitely recommend. This book could have been decent but it is in desperate need of an editor, It was so rife with errors that it completely detracted from the story, The errors became more and more common as the book went on until it was to the point where I was finding one everyminutes or so.
Some are basic editing errors with a missing letter or punctuation, but a lot of it was the use of a wrong word taunt/taut, arrange/arraign, homonym errors isle/aisle, your/you're, and just poor grammar then/than, mismatched subjects and predicates, etc.
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An editor also could have helped get rid of some of the "fluff, " This book was far longer than it needed to be, I was bored by the time I was/finished with it,

I also found the storyline to be very predictable and the characters were flat, There was no difference in the way one spoke or acted compared to the others, It made them hard to keep separate, Yes, it's a children's/YA book but that doesn't mean the writing should be of a lesser quality than in an "adult" book.
I have read and enjoyed many YA books but unfortunately this was not one of them, The best way to describe this book is using a metaphor, Its a crude, unpolished natural diamond, Scratch the surface of the amateurish writing, and you find an epic tale where villains are villains and heroes are heroes.
The world that the author imagines feels rich and engrossing, taking me on a nostalgic trip back to my favourite fantasy novels: Garth Nixs Keys to the Kingdom, Trudi Canavans Magician, and especially, Paolinis Eragon.


But I cant pretend this is a great book, as it has too many flaws to overlook.
Firstly, the writing is riddled with mistakes, There are sections where nearly every page has a mistake: the wrong word is used, a grammatical error is made, a sentence is incomplete, etc.
The author should go over the text with a finetoothed comb, or get a proofreader to do it.
Because as a reader, it was painful, As a fellow author, I winced this is exactly the kind of text that gives selfpublishing a bad name.


The problems dont end with the prose, The characterisation leaves something to be desired as well, In short, its missing depth, Most of the characters feel like clichés: the old king, the valiant elder knight, and so on.
The only character that actually felt fleshed out was Fulgid, the golden dragon, By the way, Fulgid is a horrible name for a dragon, Writing deep, meaningful characters takes experience that the author clearly lacks, But I would suggest that he come up with a sketch of each main characters back story and motivations.


I did enjoy Tirate and Liah as the villains, Tirate in particular showed cunning, forward thinking and intelligence, which made him an effective villain, One thing I would say: I found it difficult to believe that Tirate couldnt get a single dragon knight to back him, given how important they are both militarily and politically.
It would have made the conflict more interesting, As for Liah, she provided a certain comic relief to the story,

Aside from characterisation, what annoyed me was how Ammon, the protagonist, lacked a certain amount of intelligence.
He constantly got himself into bad situations and would have died several times if not for the intervention of Fulgid, the little dragon.
Frankly, the dragon seemed far more intelligent than he was, It almost came to the point where Fulgid became the deus in the machina: if Ammon was stuck in an impossible situation, Fulgid would come to rescue him, as surely as night follows the day.
What the author really needs to do is make Ammon think his way out of a problem.


Another thing: there are too many instances where the plot hands Ammon and his allies an advantage on a silver platter.
His dragon is more special than anybody elses, His dragon finds a huge calentar deposit, His blood line is so special that everyone recognises him as king, Life is rarely this easy! He needs to face actual challengesits what makes him grow as a character.


So whats my final verdict Objectively, this book is badly written, filled with typos, and stuffed to the brim with clichés and deusexmachina.
But my heart wants to keep reading, Because there is great potential in this story,
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